This one fits the proper specs under 300 words. If you're wondering what's this about...it's just a fun writing thing. Starting a story with "The Doorbell Rang" and ending it with "the snow began to fall."
It should be no more than 300 words. Anyway, here's take two:
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The doorbell rang. I was right in the middle of my second shot of bourbon and felt a little embarrassed about heading to the door. But what the hell, it's around seven so...so what. I paused in case somebody else might answer the door I was sitting 10 feet from.
"I got it!" I yelled to the household in general, put down my copy of the I Robot I had been intending to read for the past decade and a half, and answered the door.
It was Paula from next door, widow of a well respected boxing coach who got into some state boxing hall of fame or something.
"I got your mail" She said blandly. "Here." She thrust a letter into my hand, turned and left.
"Seeya, Paula!" I said perfunctorily probably after I had closed the door, and glanced down at the envelope; hand written address on Christmasy stationary with a big, sleigh-bell stamp on the front.
My address. But addressed to some Ms. Hilda Franz.
I sat back down on the couch and yelled, "Hey...honey...do we know a Hilda Franz?"
She yelled back from the kitchen "Uh...wasn't she the previous owner of this house before she died? Like...a couple years before we bought the house or something..."
"Oooooh...yeah!"
I opened it. Inside, a standard Christmas photo-card of a large family, with a hand written note at the bottom:
Merry Christmas from all of us, Mom. Jenny says she's doing fine, now.
-- Charles.
A phone number was written carefully at the bottom.
I poured another glass of bourbon and picked up the phone.
Outside, the snow began to fall.
6 comments:
I did one, but couldn't get it 300 or less.
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Oh my goodness - I want to know what that is all about!! Way to drag us in - really well done!
Oh, wow. Now that's a call no one wants to make. Great job!
Oh so sad. I wonder how come her children don't know about her death!
Great hook! I'm definitely curious as to what happens during the phone call. And I like the MC. Kinda deadpan.
OK, now we need that phone call! So many questions. :)
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